I enjoy that fact that you tried a high fi look to the image but it seems like it needs some more work, the image itself does not seem sharp it looks as through you have focused on her hair and not her face also the overall composition of the image is not unique other then that good try and i enjoy the overall mix down o black and white that you have done

A lovely subject, needs a better execution. Composition would be better if the framing was not so close to her nose, she is looking somewhere, your eye tends to get pulled along the eyeline. But, here the edge of frame is too close. The image is over exposed and IMO, not in an attractive way. And the face is soft focus.

I have to agree with the other comments. Perhaps just a little too harsh on the contrast so the highlights are just too blown, particularly the bottom left of frame and the model's hair at top centre.

The blown out regions really distract on this.

The in-focus hair is an interesting approach. It's as if her hair was more important than her face.

Nice attempt, but the exposure problems and the hair over the left eye are a distraction.

Best,
Jon